Blurb – Help needed!

So I’m re-releasing Bardo and I’m also putting out a book of short stories. I think they’re not too bad. However, I really need help with the blurbs. They’re a big part of selling a book and I think it’s a skill in itself to write them – a skill I just don’t have.  Here’s what I’ve got so far, any suggestions would be a big help:

The PM

The PMIt should have been the Prime Minister’s first day in office. He should have been leading the country out of environmental disaster, but he’s not the only one who thinks he’s in charge.

The PM is a collection of short sci-fi and fantasy stories. It’s an eclectic mix of engaging fiction, inspiring ideas, humorous tales and daring adventure. In these fourteen stories, find out who’s really in charge in “The PM”, learn about the secret life of teaching in “Teacher without portfolio” and discover what dangers await in the depths, in the powder fantasy “Hold the line.”

Bardo

BardoNikki finds herself in a world between realms, the Bardo, and time is running out. Soon her essence will be scattered forever. Can she pull herself together?

Bardo, follows Nikki, a young schoolgirl who has an unfortunate accident and finds herself trapped in the Bardo. It won’t be long before she’ll be scattered across the realms. With only a dog to guide her, can she re-unite herself in time to escape? Fun, fast and humorous, Bardo asks questions about some deep issues, including who we really are, the nature of life and death and why schools insist on students wearing school uniforms when there are much more fashionable options available.

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4 responses to “Blurb – Help needed!

  1. I’m not very good at blurb writing either (I’m editing mine at the moment), but just a few comments.
    PM
    -Maybe change the first line a bit, ‘his first day in office for the PM’ sounds a bit odd (maybe say ‘PM’ before you use ‘him’).
    -‘Sci-fiction’ was a bit confusing for me, I usually see ‘sci-fi’ or ‘science fiction’
    -‘Humors tales’ should be ‘Humorous tales’
    -Should ‘Powder fantasy’ be Power fantasy?
    Bardo
    -There’s more repetition between the two paragraphs than I would want (if they’re both part of the same blurb).
    -You can probably remove the ellipses.
    Feel free to ignore any of the above, they’re just suggestions. Good luck!

  2. I had a look, but I think you have comments disabled.

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